Comments on: Art in April http://finelinelive.com/2008/03/18/art-in-april/ drudge diversion or a non-endearing distraction Mon, 25 Apr 2011 05:20:20 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Jason Janik http://finelinelive.com/2008/03/18/art-in-april/comment-page-1/#comment-19504 Jason Janik Tue, 25 Mar 2008 17:13:07 +0000 http://finelinelive.com/2008/03/18/art-in-april/#comment-19504 Whoever wrote that press release did a terrible job editing. I know jayme nourallah, and when I saw her name listed, I decided to stop and read further. Her bio was well-written... when it was in the first person, as she originally wrote it. Whoever took her bio and changed it to third person forgot to change all the associated verbs and modifiers. Now it reads like Karl from Sling Blade wrote it. I feel bad, because I really like Jayme and her art, but whoever butchered her nice bio makes her sound less professional. If you can't send out a decent press release, you need to find and pay someone who CAN!!! Whoever wrote that press release did a terrible job editing. I know jayme nourallah, and when I saw her name listed, I decided to stop and read further. Her bio was well-written… when it was in the first person, as she originally wrote it.

Whoever took her bio and changed it to third person forgot to change all the associated verbs and modifiers. Now it reads like Karl from Sling Blade wrote it. I feel bad, because I really like Jayme and her art, but whoever butchered her nice bio makes her sound less professional. If you can’t send out a decent press release, you need to find and pay someone who CAN!!!

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